Hey bro. I know im not John K. but I could offer you a comment. Great characters! I can tell you have a huge Simpsons influence to your style. I also like your selective use of color where its appropriate. Your right about the background. Its a little distracting. Really tone down the background if you want your characters (the main focus) to stand out. Remember, objects closer to you have more tone and darker outline and things farther have less tone and thinner outlines. Other than that, they look great. I see good things for you if you keep it up!!.. Later
I would've loved to see more attention brought to the gag in the last panel, though.
The panel is very busy and there is little to help us focus on the dog's mouth and carry us to the guy's leg.
I find the fond hard to read as well (try a simpler font that doesn't have serifs - Blambot.com has some very cheap ones (and some very cool freebies as well))
Simple solution would be to
a) invert the panel (we read left to right, so we'd catch the dog's head first and then move on to the guy's leg)
b) since you're already using subtle colors, using red in a similar was as you colored the background would've highlighted the bood and given instant focus to the gag mechanics.
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Hey bro. I know im not John K. but I could offer you a comment. Great characters! I can tell you have a huge Simpsons influence to your style. I also like your selective use of color where its appropriate. Your right about the background. Its a little distracting. Really tone down the background if you want your characters (the main focus) to stand out. Remember, objects closer to you have more tone and darker outline and things farther have less tone and thinner outlines. Other than that, they look great. I see good things for you if you keep it up!!.. Later
I like it, too... very funny. You should come check out my comics on my blog!
Thanks Ryan and Brian, I really appreciate it. You're both fantastic artists
Nice, I like the style.
I would've loved to see more attention brought to the gag in the last panel, though.
The panel is very busy and there is little to help us focus on the dog's mouth and carry us to the guy's leg.
I find the fond hard to read as well (try a simpler font that doesn't have serifs - Blambot.com has some very cheap ones (and some very cool freebies as well))
Simple solution would be to
a) invert the panel (we read left to right, so we'd catch the dog's head first and then move on to the guy's leg)
b) since you're already using subtle colors, using red in a similar was as you colored the background would've highlighted the bood and given instant focus to the gag mechanics.
Overall pretty cool :)
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